I read this last week but seems like my comment didn’t go thru! It was a great read, and I’m super curious to read more about your world!
I would have preferred to find more of what made this world unique in the first couple of minutes of the read, because I’m sure there’s a lot that stands out, it just came later on the story
Thank you so much Luis! I'm trying not to info-dump or make the exposition too crowded, but I do hope to have built the world up more in the reader's mind by the end of the first sequence. The next scene has already been published if you'd like to check it out!
Thank you so much for both the kind words AS WELL as the criticism. I’m well aware my writing isn’t perfect (it’s below the standards I’d like to hold for myself even) but improvement is something that comes with time. Your criticism — as well as you having taken the time to read it — couldn’t be more appreciated.
I read this last week but seems like my comment didn’t go thru! It was a great read, and I’m super curious to read more about your world!
I would have preferred to find more of what made this world unique in the first couple of minutes of the read, because I’m sure there’s a lot that stands out, it just came later on the story
Looking forward to read more!
Thank you so much Luis! I'm trying not to info-dump or make the exposition too crowded, but I do hope to have built the world up more in the reader's mind by the end of the first sequence. The next scene has already been published if you'd like to check it out!
Nice work man, keep it up!
Thank you 😁
Great job, Kyle! Loved the ending of this scene. Definitely hooked me to want to learn more about Ruka and his story.
Thank you Thomas!
Thank you so much for both the kind words AS WELL as the criticism. I’m well aware my writing isn’t perfect (it’s below the standards I’d like to hold for myself even) but improvement is something that comes with time. Your criticism — as well as you having taken the time to read it — couldn’t be more appreciated.